Kalliel ([info]kalliel) wrote,
@ 2008-10-07 05:03:00
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[Fan Fic] Pieces of the Sun - Akatsuki, drabble, character study, PG-13
Pieces of the Sun
Naruto fan fiction

Genre: drabble, character study
Rating: PG-13 (T)
Characters: Akatsuki, (Zetsu and Madara/Tobi share one)
Pairings: Konan/Pein, Deidara/Sasori
Word Count: 500 exactly
Summary: The self-possessed, the outcasted.
Notes: Each character is allotted exactly 50 words (well, Zetsu and M each get 25, as hinted at above). Written for [info]hieronymousb’s birthday. Have a spectacular one, love! :D






Today has already witnessed the birth of Akatsuki; the first rays—

(glisten in her hair; dusk into dawn).

Today, her eyes join his looking out, and together they observe the cityscape. This is where I will stand, she says; till time ends, till the sun sets back into our hands.


--


298
bodies in his collection.

299,
the day Deidara gives up his. (Sasori sews death beside Deidara’s heart.) Would you kill me or love me? question Deidara’s eyes. The words out of his mouth are another story.

Deidara? His. Deidara’s possessions? …His.

For the first time, Sasori owns himself.

300.


--


To orchestrate mangekyou, its user must be strong enough to withstand his own illusions. Every time he pulls Sasuke into nightmares, Itachi relives That Night—colored by Sasuke’s terror, but it is all Itachi has; alone he doesn’t recall very much at all.

It’s always been about remembering the pain.


--


Every time Deidara forces Sasori to second-guess, to blink, Sasori is less perfect. Hesitations are small victories, and Deidara safekeeps them like stones in a basket, waiting for the day Sasori is not-so-great (or rather, Deidara is greater).

This is a game of self-possession, and in these Deidara always wins.


--


Black white black white (but no grey; you are the grey one, old and treacherous). “How can you tell if it’s sunrise or sunset? They’re the same (the colors are the same)—”

You become the one to raise it;

the one to tear it down.


(Such a crooked smile!)


--


Kakuzu keeps what he calls a practical collection. Bills from the Fire Country, crafted from red bark that curls like tongues of flame, strings of shell slivers from the islands. (Two will pay for a meal, but only one will buy a swordsman-for-hire. Kakuzu needs neither and keeps the tender.)


--


It’s not a lie, Itachi-san. And it’s not a delusion. The swordsman who is ready to fight is always the strongest swordsman. And I am always ready to fight.

Hundreds of shinobi are stronger than I. But are they here, right now, fighting me? No.

So are you ready, Itachi-san?


--


Hidan has only his faith and a body blessed with the blood of angels with which to serve his God. He spits contempt at his partner for puerile attachment to material goods. Kakuzu simply shrugs, and Hidan goes hungry.

(He can win every fight, but he will lose every peace.)


--


“Pein is invincible.” Assured.

Not blind to danger—never. Before all else is the recognition that God is mortal. One day, they both will be killed (and they will be killed; God cannot die unless another’s hands contrive against Him). But they will not be beaten.

Then comes the dusk.






end.
13 August 2008 - 6 October 2008

AN: I sincerely hope that I could not possibly have screwed anyone’s characterizations over too badly in all of fifty words. But, you know, it’s always possible. Personally, I think Itachi and Kisame got fucked over, but eh.


Pein not featured because the doodler is incapable of drawing things that are not girls, or do not look enough like one such that the differences in character design are negligible. :F



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[info]000_hester_000
2008-10-07 08:01 pm UTC (link)
Idk, I quite liked Itachi's, actually. It's not exactly how I would see him, but it's definitely an interesting take on his personality.

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[info]kalliel
2008-10-11 07:03 am UTC (link)
Weirdly enough, it's not how I really see him, either? Which might be why I don't like it all that much. XD But it seemed like an interesting alternate angle, so I figured, what the hell, it's 50 words.

I'm glad you enjoyed!

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[info]hieronymousb
2008-10-07 08:56 pm UTC (link)
Omgomgomg, yay. :D I can't wait to give a better review after I get back from class. YOU R AWESOME. :DDDDDDDDDD

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[info]anat_astarte
2008-10-07 11:24 pm UTC (link)
Oooh quite wonderful!

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[info]kalliel
2008-10-11 07:03 am UTC (link)
Thank you~! :3

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[info]hieronymousb
2008-10-10 09:10 pm UTC (link)
Better comment:
I'm impressed. XD; Considering how short each of these were, you worked a pretty good bit of meaning into them, and into the set. Naturally, my favourite were the Pein and Konan drabbles. The last one was my favourite. It had such a pretty, fatalistic tone to it. Makes me sad for both of them, because uh, is there any doubt that they are both going to die? [I also like the idea of them being aware of this on some level.]

The Konan art is really pretty. Your "doodles" are nice. I had to lol at the comment about why Pein fails to make an appearance. :P

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[info]kalliel
2008-10-11 07:09 am UTC (link)
Ye~eah. I tried for Pein, I really did! But before I even finished his head, I was like... Hm. I think I need a new sheet of paper. XP

I'm glad you liked the PK~ My state of mind was something along the lines of, wow, if anything I hope I get those down okay, because damn it, those are the most important ones! And, uh, I randomly had Hidan and Kakuzu written, and Sasori written, and Konan written (with every intention of doing Pein someday), so I kind of get the feeling the others came across as filler? :F

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[info]postingwhore
2008-10-12 01:44 am UTC (link)
This is fucking amazing. You've summed up everyone so extremely well in only 50 words. ♥!

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[info]twitchytwitch
2008-10-12 03:15 am UTC (link)
I think my favorites would have to be Zetsu's, Konan's, and Itachi's, simply because they're very, very interesting.

Hidan is great. Perfectly in-character. xD

These are awesome~

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[info]disownmereturns
2008-11-12 10:09 am UTC (link)
This. Was. Brilliant!

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